tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1030738341193333843.post7559290576040063122..comments2023-05-05T07:46:05.316-07:00Comments on I Breathe Through My Fingertips: VoiceSamuel Alexanderhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/15954156224278651551noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1030738341193333843.post-66554175264010138312012-04-05T20:15:45.515-07:002012-04-05T20:15:45.515-07:00thanks.... i did only give it one reread so i'...thanks.... i did only give it one reread so i'll give it another go, i thought the rhythm might have been out of place in some spots but just couldn't tell. Glad you liked it. And tanks for the input.Samuel Alexanderhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15954156224278651551noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1030738341193333843.post-44449565346109224252012-04-05T20:03:10.889-07:002012-04-05T20:03:10.889-07:00This poem is quite literal and could be taken in t...This poem is quite literal and could be taken in the next stage by adding a few devices. Parallelism would have worked great, as we all "mumble" to ourselves in this manner. The rhythm can be slightly thrown off in a longer piece as this, so using specific meter can with various feet can add the fluidity between commas, pauses, and end of lines. I found the speaker very realistic though, and each declaration made was a smooth transition from one stanza to the next. Great final line. Overall, nice piece, Poet.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14351410884995783787noreply@blogger.com